Tuesday, June 12, 2012

A Black Window (55 word fiction)



A barefooted kid came running towards a black window of a V.I.P. car. With a scorching sun overhead and hands barely reaching the glasses of window, he thumped.


Those black curtains were still sealing the cool air inside. 


Wheels turned after a while, leaving behind an empty stomach of hardly '8 year' old. 'Health minister' was getting late for his speech on 'Children Welfare'.     





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20 comments:

  1. magiceyeJune 12, 2012 at 6:30 PM

    poignant....

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    1. The Indian Sales GuyJune 12, 2012 at 11:43 PM

      ya, a poignant issue. Thanks for the comment magiceye. :)

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  2. TTTJune 13, 2012 at 7:09 AM

    i actually got goosebumps reading this post ....

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    1. The Indian Sales GuyJune 13, 2012 at 9:55 AM

      Thank you so much tangy....:) This is my first attempt at 55 word fiction and it's good to know that few (very few) liking it....

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  3. PanchaliJune 13, 2012 at 12:15 PM

    soul stirring post and leaves one speechless...

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    1. The Indian Sales GuyJune 13, 2012 at 12:20 PM

      Oh!!!! Thank you so much panchalibolchi..New bloggers like me are always in desperate need of such lovely comments..:)

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  4. aayanmanJune 14, 2012 at 3:00 AM

    Nice work...

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  5. The Indian Sales GuyJune 14, 2012 at 10:59 AM

    Thank you so much gyanban....:)

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  6. AmitAagJune 14, 2012 at 10:51 PM

    ...stirring...hard hitting! Nice work Ashish!

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    1. The Indian Sales GuyJune 14, 2012 at 11:44 PM

      It's good to see you here amit....Thank you so much....:)

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  7. debajyotiJune 18, 2012 at 11:46 AM

    i read this post, forgot to comment, old age. anyway, lovely post Rahul. if you continue to write like this then we will be fans of your 55 word fictions.

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    1. The Indian Sales GuyJune 18, 2012 at 12:32 PM

      Thank you so much Debajyoti....Fan of my writing????? Your comment has pumped a half liter more blood in me...thank you so much....:)

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  8. debajyotiJune 18, 2012 at 11:59 AM

    have absolutely no clue why i called you Rahul, apologies for that ASHISH :D

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    1. The Indian Sales GuyJune 18, 2012 at 12:38 PM

      Rahul was a character of the post you previously read (lesson).....So my post persisted on your mind..(See, i am so positive)...:D

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  9. lanishaJune 21, 2012 at 7:33 AM

    i think this piece of your writing is impeccable...a real burning issue which you described in few words....a very good attempt on current scenario.

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    1. The Indian Sales GuyJune 26, 2012 at 6:05 AM

      Thank you so much Lanisha....Glad to have such a lovely comment..

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  10. Vaishali JainAugust 16, 2012 at 12:38 PM

    I liked the idea behind the story. An issue that has long been ignored and you got it into light in so few words. Kudos!

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    1. The Indian Sales GuyAugust 17, 2012 at 9:35 AM

      Thank you..:) Congrats for winning write up cafe contest....:)

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  11. AnonymousAugust 17, 2012 at 4:21 AM

    Fab!

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