Tuesday, June 12, 2012

A Black Window (55 word fiction)



A barefooted kid came running towards a black window of a V.I.P. car. With a scorching sun overhead and hands barely reaching the glasses of window, he thumped.


Those black curtains were still sealing the cool air inside. 


Wheels turned after a while, leaving behind an empty stomach of hardly '8 year' old. 'Health minister' was getting late for his speech on 'Children Welfare'.     





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    1. ya, a poignant issue. Thanks for the comment magiceye. :)

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  2. i actually got goosebumps reading this post ....

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    1. Thank you so much tangy....:) This is my first attempt at 55 word fiction and it's good to know that few (very few) liking it....

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  3. soul stirring post and leaves one speechless...

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    1. Oh!!!! Thank you so much panchalibolchi..New bloggers like me are always in desperate need of such lovely comments..:)

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  4. ...stirring...hard hitting! Nice work Ashish!

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    1. It's good to see you here amit....Thank you so much....:)

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  5. i read this post, forgot to comment, old age. anyway, lovely post Rahul. if you continue to write like this then we will be fans of your 55 word fictions.

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    1. Thank you so much Debajyoti....Fan of my writing????? Your comment has pumped a half liter more blood in me...thank you so much....:)

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  6. have absolutely no clue why i called you Rahul, apologies for that ASHISH :D

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    1. Rahul was a character of the post you previously read (lesson).....So my post persisted on your mind..(See, i am so positive)...:D

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  7. i think this piece of your writing is impeccable...a real burning issue which you described in few words....a very good attempt on current scenario.

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    1. Thank you so much Lanisha....Glad to have such a lovely comment..

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  8. I liked the idea behind the story. An issue that has long been ignored and you got it into light in so few words. Kudos!

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    1. Thank you..:) Congrats for winning write up cafe contest....:)

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